Sentence + Song Suggestions, Anyone?

Okay. So I have writer's block. Not that I don't have ideas floating around in my sleep-deprived brain or anything - in fact, it's actually quite the opposite.

I have so many ideas and scenarios in my head that I'm having some trouble transposing them into legible sense. If I can't understand my own thoughts, what more my readers? I would hate to confuse anyone and have the story ruined as a result of my brain farts (and partly due to an insomniac cat outside my house that whines incessantly all night and provides me with ample distraction. Though, I kind of feel bad for it sometimes, but that's besides the point.)

Two of the characters in my novel have reached a point where they're both running through the woods at the edge of town from something insatiable and sinister.

Consider this sentence and please tell me if it's a good line to put during a chase scene such as the one previously described:

Breathing - heavy, harsh, and heated - followed right behind us...

Is the alliteration too much, or does it add something to the suspense? Please tell me what you think.

Also, wouldn't it be cool if we all wrote a story or a poem using a particular line or phrase and see what we each come up with? You know, kind of like what Mary Shelley did with her literary friends (hence we have Frankenstein), or the song-writing challenges that Jason Mraz would do with his fellow music buddies (The Dynamo of Volition, for instance, came about from the challenge of writing a song using the phrase "blind man's bike"). Isn't creativity a wondrous thing? ;)

For inspiration, I've been listening to UnderOath's "Reinventing Your Exit" on repeat during the tense, adrenaline-filled moments of my story. I could never really tap into the zone of writing these particular scenes without it. The odd thing is that even though I absolutely love rock music, I'm not particularly fond of the screamo kind. But this song is one of the few that's made my list of exceptions. I guess it has to do with the fact that the harsh, grating screaming is balanced with really compelling and really good singing. Together, the song strikes a great balance between anger, desperation, and raw power. This song's been on my mp3 player since I was 16, so maybe that means something, hehe.

If you guys also happen to have some song suggestions for action/suspense scenes, please share them. I'd love to hear them - I'm always in search of awe-inspiring music.

Meanwhile, if you're interested in the song that I'm talking about, here it is, along with the lyrics on the screen.




Lately I've also been listening to the dynamic duo Tegan & Sara. They're amazing! Here's the acoustic version of their song "The Con," which also plays in my head occasionally during my story-storming sessions.



Enjoy! Maybe these songs can invoke some kind of inspiration for you, too. ;)